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my girl's day [tri-ku] (Haiku) by lmp

morning sunbeams catch fairies dancing in the air; my girl claps with glee. golden curls bouncing, her shadow shortens, she runs, her laughter fluid. quiet face looks up to moonlight and stars above. she whispers goodnight.

lmp 18-Apr-06/6:23 AM
oh, and thanks for the comment on the shadow bit. i thought it worked well to convey the time of day... [see, for that one you *suggested* working with the time of day and did not give the actual phrase. a nudge, if you will, i prefer...]




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