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my girl's day [tri-ku]
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Haiku
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lmp
morning sunbeams catch fairies dancing in the air; my girl claps with glee. golden curls bouncing, her shadow shortens, she runs, her laughter fluid. quiet face looks up to moonlight and stars above. she whispers goodnight.
lmp
18-Apr-06/6:21 AM
excellent suggestions, although i cannot [in good conscience] use "watercolor laugh" now that you outrightly suggested it. i will work on that idea of duality some more to tighten it up.
and FIE! those syllables. i *will* correct that blatant oversight.
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