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view from the top (Free verse) by pollywolly

lost i flounder and stumble on the path running faster to stay ahead of the cold fingers grasping at me from within the mist which swiftly creeps down the mountain behind me and swallows the land below hiding her glorious view from the top

Dovina 15-Apr-06/11:32 AM
Good until the last 3 lines, which negate her glorious view. Maybe she looks above the mist.




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