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The One (Free verse) by deval1516

I have found someone, And he might be the one. He dosent know, But it will show. The way I felt, Made my heart melt. He is so fine, He blows my mind. He is so cute, Hes hard to boot. If he breaks my heart, I will fall apart. Is he the one, or another somone.

MacFrantic 14-Apr-06/12:43 PM
Eliminate spelling errors, and maybe make it a less cliche and this isn't half bad. *5*




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