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Letting go (Free verse) by Caducus

She was my nettle and dock leaf my dinner break thoughts on the swings and slides, my Math class interruption and every sunset shadow. Not anymore. She was a veil of grey velvet a tangible illusion the warmth in blood calm storm cigarette starlet and now she and i are everything without each other are miserable happy and i resemble the head of a roman statue decapitated staring at my body being leered on by love tourists.

Dovina 11-Apr-06/12:45 PM
I almost laughed at the ending - the old-time style of it. The rest has some pretty good lines, but I don't think the funny spacing helps.




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