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Buried (Free verse) by Enkidu

For the sake of Gallantry I'll tussle in the wood And make an offering To nymphs Of condescending good There I shall unweave The very fabric Of your soul And ask the Earth To swallow us Beneath her Weathered knoll

ecargo 10-Apr-06/7:18 AM
You don't set this up enough--it needs more context and story. Second verse is better than the first.




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