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James The Dashing Pirate(Rewrite) (Free verse) by Luzr

He is simple and unique, relentlessly cunning. An epic adventure packed into a coloring book. Rated R for language and explicit content Daringly devoted, to making a smile cross your lips An arrogant aside, beautifully stunning. With a smart baby blues they call him the one night casanova Champagne for the price of beer Heads become heels, his heels become gold waltzing through conversations A simple melody, catchy and quick. With great depth, and hidden perceptions.

Ranger 9-Apr-06/9:26 AM
Great words, I felt as though the metaphor could be taken further; I don't see quite enough of the swashbuckling, buccaneering nature, hunting for treasure and adventure. And although the Casanova line is good, I didn't think it managed to fit well with the pirate theme.
Aside from that, well written and enjoyable!




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