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Or Outward (Triolet) by MacFrantic

Vagaries in dispassionate red Or outward sounds the bell A monument to furies' spell Vagaries in dispassionate red Fragile storms eclipse your head Speak your name and know it well Vagaries in dispassionate red Or outward sounds the bell

Ranger 9-Apr-06/9:20 AM
"furies'", is this "fury's" or are furies a type of creature? That's the only grammatical crit I have with this, it reads well and, yes, is vague but it really did leave me desperate to find a meaning to it. It feels as though there is a message, or something like that, hidden just beneath the words. In all honesty, the whole thing sounds like it's a code or a series of anagrams for something.
I'll have to return to this if I'm going to find a meaning. My brain is fried right now.




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