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James The Dashing Pirate(Rewrite) (Free verse) by Luzr

He is simple and unique, relentlessly cunning. An epic adventure packed into a coloring book. Rated R for language and explicit content Daringly devoted, to making a smile cross your lips An arrogant aside, beautifully stunning. With a smart baby blues they call him the one night casanova Champagne for the price of beer Heads become heels, his heels become gold waltzing through conversations A simple melody, catchy and quick. With great depth, and hidden perceptions.

Dovina 8-Apr-06/11:52 AM
Some good descriptive language. But to make it compelling it needs a stting and specific story or event, otherwise it kind of sies there without life.




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