Niphredil2 Apr 2006

You have a fine narrative style and a healthy sense of rhythm and meter to go with it. I have to agree, though, that a monster poem isn't the most fascinating read, unless there's some twist at then. I actually found bits of it quite amusing, (monsters knocking at the door), although the general impression i got of the monsters was of a traffic light (green skin, flashing yellow and red eyes) with really sharp teeth.

The part about Jane reading from a book is incomplete and feels quite out of place.