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Kristi's Quiescence (Free verse) by matt door

She empties me, so carefully, with her saddest smile come autumn. She folds me gently with regret, and sets me softly in her sentiment. She lays me just aside, (such a warm repose from winter), for when the birds come back once more.

Ranger 30-Mar-06/12:45 PM
'Her saddest smile...' got me going, I feel there's more waiting to be said from there. However, I also think it would spoil the swift beauty of this one. I really like the brevity of it, although I'm not convinced by the first two lines. Still a very pleasant read.




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