god'swife22 Mar 2006

I think you should drop the entire first tri-whateveryoucallit.

Like a pregnant women's.
That is love...


Drop sun at the end of stanza 3, or drop yellow.

In the 4th stanza, why is there a ; after cold? The next line reads like the beginning of a new thought. I can't see how it ties in with London's smog head cold.

It ends beautifully.