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My God (Free verse) by ElmoBeavisButthead

My god is not above the clouds, Nor below my feet, My god is within me, Everyday, Every moment, Through happiness, Through heartbreak. My god is my everything, My muse, My will, My spirit, My love, My mind, My sin, My soul. Everyone has their own god, Everyone is their own god, For they can change themselves, And the world around them, Whenever they feel like. My god is many things in this world, A leader, A follower, A sinner, A friend, A lover. Good or dire, We all are gods.

Ranger 18-Mar-06/6:24 AM
Oh - and I'd change the title. It seems like an exclamation at the moment and gave me a false impression before I read the poem. Don't be afraid to try a slightly more pretentious title (I love coming up with cool titles) - you could play on the biblical 'I Am' - which is the classic trick in a poem like this. So, for instance, "God, I Am" might work, or even just "I Am". What do you think?




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