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Looking Back (Free verse) by x0lovelylarnx0

Looking back I wonder what my life would be like if I had done things differently I realize that one single tiny thing can change everything I try to picture what my life would be like without certain people Looking back it's hard to remember parts of my life Yet it seems like just yesterday I was in elementry school Where I met my one true love Looking back I wonder how my life would be different If I had never asked him to be my boyfriend It scares me to think of a life without him I think I am supposed to be with him forever Looking back there are some things I wish I had done differently Now I can't change any of it What's done is done

MacFrantic 18-Mar-06/12:08 AM
Good "conversational" piece, but a bit lacking as a poem. Was "elementry" intentional? Please say it was. *6*




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