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Settling in (Other) by INTRANSIT

Winter is sliding in, I can hear it in the way the garage door squeals against it's track. The washer and dryer fight like brother and sister, my front door asks: "Whoooo are you?" The ceiling fan hums, whirrs and tinks a sconce. Turning the heat up, the motor shudders to a start; ducts bwong in approval. Still, there's one room that hoards the blankets and re- fuses to warm up. I make my way towards the bathroom as the floor groans adoringly, and the plumbing sings its' vibrato welcome as the tub fills slowly. I sink in and listen to the house pulling the siding tight.

Niphredil 15-Mar-06/11:09 AM
This is a beautifully musical poem, with different sounds and creaks to savor almost in every verse. Kudos for 'bwong', and cheers for the plumbing in vibrato!

'adoringly' jarred, I must agree. Maybe 'companionably', 'cheerfully' or something alond those lines would be more appropriate?




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