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Desolation (Free verse) by Beyond_Dreams

I'm hiding within this cascading oppression. your breath carries me away, so I reach for you; but nothing seems tangible. Shuffling emotions from deep within, scatter along the roadside; hidden from my own existence. The shadows dance when I fall upon broken glass. My damaged body only seems like a reflection from my insanity buried inside my innocence. And the world spins around me manipulating reality to a paradigm, Scorched and shunned I denounce you. And it's not until I pull my individuality back and let that hold me together, that I remember you. I no longer need to sacrifice who I am to be happy without you, It's that I'm happy with you. I'm happy knowing I don't have to succumb to the conglomerate views of the world and I'm no longer poisoned with lies. Axiom.

Ranger 13-Mar-06/5:25 AM
Kind of defiant which is nice to see. The problem with it, though, is that it's all been written before. For example, 'broken dreams' makes me assume you listen to Green Day. If you could make this something new and innovative it would work well.




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