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Windflower (Free verse) by matt door

Can a lilac bloom be like the primrose passion of wholeness lost? Like the salty-sweet electric swell of reckless was? Like our entwinement of new moist suntanned bliss of then? Can it smell even half as sweet as her heavy breath come dawn? Like the young, whispered promise of brand-new forever?

Niphredil 11-Mar-06/12:39 PM
I'm afraid my heavy breath come dawn isn't that sweet... that aside, I enjoyed the composition and flow of your poem.




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