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A HANGMAN'S MOANING (Free verse) by Dhanesh M Kumar

Is there anyone who sees my mind Alas doing for the sake of bread; The justice perhaps may have a thousand reasons to make him stranglehold, surmounted my knot. That final stare varies, person to person Often making my mind so brittle, agonized faces many I have seen, But so penetrating is the beaming smile! Me the tool and he the sufferer, Is there anyone who sees my mind?

Ranger 5-Mar-06/10:22 AM
Not bad at all, although it could do with a little more punctuation - 'agonized faces many I have seen' needs to be something like '...faces - many I have seen'. And so on. I wasn't sure about the penultimate line but I do like the final line being the first line repeated.




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