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A Failed Proposition Under The Night Sky (Free verse) by Ranger

Unlike most who gaze at stars He stared not through rosehip mist But instead spent one night Standing Atlas, dreaming of a burden lifting Telescope raised in a silent toast Like a beacon lit, lens aflame Such wide-eyed squint as Venus passed In prism, caught within its round glass eye He hoped to take that thin gold ring Through which he now looks Placing diamond in the band With ruby glitter on its right But his hand fell before they joined As Venus left - a hammer's arc Could the mist, a flowing turn of white Seem by dawn to him avail? Kneeling, no A cockerel early risen, tense Brings the news that night has gone And once again It cries An astronomer will die at dawn

Ranger 5-Mar-06/5:58 AM
Thank you for your comments :D I've read them and I think I agree with the majority of what you've said. I always appreciate comments (although my 'discussions' with poetandknowit suggest otherwise; I was 16 at the time, forgive me for them!) - I do know various people on here, or who used to be on here, but only a few of them remain. It's always good to know what you think of my stuff - and I'll always give you my thoughts too!




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