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The North Wind (Lyric) by Ranger

I don't care where the wicked North Wind blows There's a feeling inside that unendingly grows Can I see a star that permanently glows? Well maybe in the end it all just goes to show Said I'm really not bothered where the wild wind blows I'm restless on my own, so soon I may follow There's a voice within the breeze that always cries out loud But with each silver lining there has to be a cloud I'm giving up my life to chase a feather in the wind And if I should now catch you then you must soon give in And fragile as a flower's dream my heart splits alone All the while the wheel of time's rolling on home I tried to say you're somebody to me Not merely anybody I suppose I could live without But what kind of life would that be? Despite my words I didn't say what I wished to It wasn't veiled, I hoped you'd see through Every little thing I told you is true But I wasn't brave enough to say I love you

LilMsLadyPoet 3-Mar-06/9:19 AM
First two lines> good! Some good lines sprinkled here and there. It is not the best poem ever written, but you did attempt to say this 'coming of age' type thing in a unique way. I like the title choice...and to compare the north wind with a longing for a realized need for warmth...that's original.




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