LilMsLadyPoet3 Mar 2006

Favorite places:
Whose timeless eyes of long-lost years
will watch and wait and show
But her day to be praised came centuries ago
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2nd stanza could be really good with some work. The rythm is just a minute twitch off.
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stanza 3: I had to giggle at...witty thought.
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stanza 4 the rythm is good...the last line didn't work for me, though. seemed cheesy.