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Oaxaca city fragment (Free verse) by poetandknowit

hollow gut women search shit filled gutters for food scraps mongrel pups ready for the razor and half feathered, Johne's infested starving cocks sniffed and pecked past, before being caught and butchered to feed bony yellow babies sickened by birth.

poetandknowit 10-Sep-02/8:49 AM
Thanks for the catch Christof. I want to keep it in present tense considering it is only a fragment, at least now, in a series of fragments taken from doing work south of the border (US that is). The cocks (as in fighting), many are let loose and roam the streets, and pups (everywhere) have already gone by so what they have done, sniffed and pecked, is past tense, and what the women are doing is present and future perfect (butcher) I suppose. Quite the scene though if you are ever down that way.




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