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Whalecrack (Other) by wlshepherd

Whalecrack and poppycock, I sprained my sock. Sleek mac wont mend my shack, Or hurt my back. Sea-gull egg, I weep and beg- Don't touch my leg. Treacle fever, from an unbeliever, Sent to bed by the snake-hipped weaver. Through greasy rain and warming pain, I start to descend the hill again.

Ranger 1-Mar-06/9:16 AM
Heh, personally I love nonsense poetry. I do, however, prefer nonsense poems to keep a strong sense of timing...also, I'd like to see more imagery than you give here.
Gave me the impression of a beggar (slum being patched up with an abandoned piece of plastic, sea-gull egg (coin), tragic injury etc. etc. etc.)




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