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Empty Chronicles (Free verse) by Scarlett

Feasting on the mulberry binder Lost in dreams and legends Deep within the shade of Pyramus and Thisbe Wisest not to bud Quickly into lines of Black and white, but For the force of Minerva’s night, Inspiration melts The crayon peace Of mind Trapped inside Blank pages, cold Press paper in a simple tag, I write “Bloom me mulberry”

Blue Magpie 27-Feb-06/2:44 AM
Not really my sort of poetry so I can't realy comment on whether it is any good or not, but it seems that a few more commas could be useful, and as a graecophile I would rather Athina than Minerva, but this is just my personal belief that the Greeks were more artistic that the Romans.




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