poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on On Looking Back by Dovina.

Blue Magpie23 Feb 2006

It would work better, in my not-so-humble opinion if you had the metre right, as in---------

I once had a friend all in black,
Who felt a sharp twinge in his back.
With his blood on my knife,
He fled for his life,
So we never quite got in the sack.