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Iron Sky (Triolet) by MacFrantic

She adopted manners of a sort Rough, unpolished worship of the soil Pollack praise her colorful retort She adopted manners of a sort Cursed the iron skies before the court Relieved us of the burden of her foil She adopted manners of a sort Rough, unpolished worship of the soil

Dovina 22-Feb-06/11:25 AM
"Pollack praise her colorful retort" uses the telling word "colorful" and needs a comma after "praise." Would be better to show a colorful retort.




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