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Sunday i will dream again (Free verse) by Caducus

Sundays toll peeled eyes and doves, I harked for the Nazarene as my shoulder war was lost and I collided with my Demons. Ignorance is Man's Babylon. He chalks around the dead empowering his weakness kissing his fragrant corpse. Find love in my frown lines. With pursed tender scarlet and leave upon me your map so I can lose myself, finding you. Inferno clock strikes its hands on me and I am gold by days end, changing with sky blending into night, on catacombs of satin where you lay no more. It's Sundays I feel her most, the coffee ring by a crossword and the way a pen looked in her mouth as she concentrated. It's Sundays I dread the most, her puncturing kiss to my cheek her cold feet searching for flesh now replaced by nothing who sleeps for yesterdays. I am walking to our place, to lay in combs of corn, to stare in your thousand eyes and hope to see one fall so I can close mine and see you again… in dreams.

Ranger 21-Feb-06/6:18 AM
Damn you Caducus, damn you to poetic injustice, you have presented me with a set of stanzas which individually are worth their weight in gold. But they don't click with each other, the joints are missing here. Each stanza has at least one absolute gem of a line in, it seems to me that you have stanzas from seven different poems put together here though. If I've missed something very important (and it's highly plausible that I have, my brain is somewhat fried right now) tell me and I will alter my reading accordingly.
PS since I disappeared from the ranker you started writing some unbelievable stuff; I feel like I missed out!




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