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lost souls (Free verse) by aamir_trichy

The fire is burning them all They know not, Cause the fire is cold, Tis not burning with flames, Tis not leaving smoke, For its inside them that consumes the soul.

Ranger 21-Feb-06/6:13 AM
And they are by no means bad lines. I'm just suggesting what I would do if they were *my* lines; if you disagree then that is absolutely fine - I'm not going to tell someone what they have to do in their poems. Write for yourself first and foremost, but when you want to write for other people, listen to what they say.




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