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lost souls (Free verse) by aamir_trichy

The fire is burning them all They know not, Cause the fire is cold, Tis not burning with flames, Tis not leaving smoke, For its inside them that consumes the soul.

Ranger 21-Feb-06/2:52 AM
Personally I would leave out 'Cause' (line 2) as it interrupts the flow, and I wouldn't bother with 'Tis' either. It's too archaic for the feel of this poem.




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