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Russian Roulette (Free verse) by <~>

Twenty years later, the first thing I notice Are your laughing eyes, laughing after everything Crazy, maybe... but surely kind (I didn't know about the accident) When you crack a smile, the cracks bleed true Leaking out the light behind colored blue blue blue let the sorrow through Everything will be True Your tears would have drowned his ghost had he ever appeared; instead they Dry in the wind as you ride home helmetless, alone He left you undone, still Laughing until that shot stopped everything; in the kitchen, ruined by that hole he blew and you never heard the crack but The recoil sent you sprawling He didn't leave a note or clean up his mess He left you with a toddler and a ring--between you Just all that blood The one you loved was gone before he left He took the bet Six chances to prove something Five held nothing for him One cashed in and Found what he was looking for

poetandknowit 10-Sep-02/12:14 AM
Put something in the hole, come on, we need more poetry that is sensational. Does she have a cat, put that in the hole or maybe the kid has a gerbil. That would do. But for a real shocker, have her put the kid in the hole. Like trying to use the life and blood of the toddler to put the man back together again. A Humpty Dumpty image, yes, that is it, a child's rhyme showing the loss of innocence....




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