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untitled#3 (Free verse) by darby pyn

Shades extend off tombstone podiums grabbing more with your eye's than words could ever touch. transgress beyond your conclusion. live in the now. sandpaper handshakes contort and test the limits of your reservation. with one exhausted thought the sides fall and your at the crossroad's of your day. impulses breach the veil between thinking and doing. etiquette is lost to the monotony of the day. nothing is sacred no one is spared.

god'swife 9-Sep-02/11:42 PM
Yes is my favorite word this evening. So yes. In my opinion this really starts working at "With one extended..." The first 4 and a half lines are some what overdone, dispite that, I like it.




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