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Journeyman (Free verse) by Glasseyez

I have traveled far and wide you know Seen four the seven seas, The beach the snow and auroras glow These things aren’t new to me, Come and go like the seasons flow No telling where I might be, I wonder round the ancient grounds Forests, lochs, and streams, Never finding always searching For a place that I might go, A place where there is everything A man like me could dream, I travel round from town to town Singing the same old song, “Might I find a friendly place Where a man like me belongs, I have traveled far and wide you know Seen four the seven seas, I long to find a place that’s nice Where I can just be me”

Ranger 14-Feb-06/2:30 AM
'Seen four the seven seas', is that meant to be '...four of the seven seas'? Because if so I think it would work better as '...four of seven seas'. If I'm missing something obvious here, bear with me. I'm tired.
I think the grammar and structure could do with being worked on, but I like the content and images - they could do with being brought out a little more though.




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