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Everything That You've Ever Wanted (Free verse) by drnick

I'd like to elope this scene And marry another reality Where I could sail ruby red seas Under the soft green moonlight Where granite stones Were soft as baby's pillows I'd like to see enormous atoms And adoring eyes To speak with a language That has no lies And I am relieved of my fear For it does not exist How boring a situation A conundrum of bliss

Ranger 10-Feb-06/12:03 PM
An hour is a decent amount of time to spend working on an idea. Unless it's one of those moments of astonishing inspiration you'll need to come back to it to fine tune the details. The imagery in this poem isn't at all bad; don't feel bad about asking for advice, that's what we're here for.




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