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Everything That You've Ever Wanted (Free verse) by drnick

I'd like to elope this scene And marry another reality Where I could sail ruby red seas Under the soft green moonlight Where granite stones Were soft as baby's pillows I'd like to see enormous atoms And adoring eyes To speak with a language That has no lies And I am relieved of my fear For it does not exist How boring a situation A conundrum of bliss

Ranger 9-Feb-06/1:03 PM
If I've interpreted the last 4 lines right (that a life without threat would be incredibly boring) then you have captured one of my deepest beliefs and the last line works marvellously. Perhaps 'Admission of a Dream' would work as a catchier title.




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