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The Perigenetic Prayer (Sonnet) by ALChemy

Father live through me, be the shadow at my heel, the glistening of my brow, my halo and my crown. For I am yours truly, the incarnated ideal and the dream unbound. Mother be my refuge from the tempest and the temptress, (My desires for the sirens lead from violets to violence) be the quintessential muse for you are the empress that rules in serene silence.

drnick 9-Feb-06/12:27 PM
Awesome. I like "violets to violence"-that is beautiful. All the lines fit very well together...I don't see where you could make any improvments. The only thing I don't like about this one is how it makes me feel incompitent as a writer. thanks a lot. ;]




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