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Prozac (Free verse) by Glasseyez

Numb to the world I shut it out Nothing could save me but love Yet I chase it away with doubt I used to be deep but something happened Lost myself in the thoughts of my life I look at the world different now I can see what is ahead but not what is before me Worthless, pointless is what it seems Feeling alive is like a dream. Deep inside I scream but silence prevails I can’t say with words how I feel. But the thoughts spin on in my hamster wheel.

SupremeDreamer 3-Feb-06/2:55 PM
Numb, shutting out world,
chasing it away with doubt.
Used to be deep - but something
happened. Lost myself in thoughts
of life, looking at the world
differently.

Able to see what is ahead,
not behind me. Seems pointless,
being alive within a dream.

Screaming deep inside, yet
silence prevails - Words can't
express what I feel, yet words
are used to describe my emotion.

That's an example of your poem using only one 'I'. Be creative, the English language is pretty flexible in usage - so long as you do so intelligently.




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