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midnight feast (Free verse) by pollywolly

creeping down the darkened road, fading light of the street lamps behind us, we giggle eyes darting nervously we run past the silent wood pausing for breath as the old manse house looms in the distance, a menacing glow emanating from a window announcing the closeness fear arising hands clasping for one another we tiptoe past through the creaking gates of the old cemetary where the midnight feast can begin

LilMsLadyPoet 31-Jan-06/9:28 AM
old manse> man's ?
What type of feasting? are you body snatchers, or young lover about to sexually feast? seems like a long road to go...no where. I am not even sure what scene I am looking at. It seems like the beginning to a story, rather than a poem.




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