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midnight feast (Free verse) by pollywolly

creeping down the darkened road, fading light of the street lamps behind us, we giggle eyes darting nervously we run past the silent wood pausing for breath as the old manse house looms in the distance, a menacing glow emanating from a window announcing the closeness fear arising hands clasping for one another we tiptoe past through the creaking gates of the old cemetary where the midnight feast can begin

ALChemy 30-Jan-06/10:02 AM
See now I'm thinking this poem is sexual but then again I always think like that:) I would tell the whole story the way you want to tell it. I think with a start like this, if you surprised us with a plot twist or mood shift like where it sounds like you're going then that would be awesome. Sometimes we start poems and just get tired or run out of ideas or lose interest in what we're writing so we just wrap it up and move on. I say hang on to those poems. usually the perfect finish will come to you eventually.




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