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Prozac (Free verse) by Glasseyez

Numb to the world I shut it out Nothing could save me but love Yet I chase it away with doubt I used to be deep but something happened Lost myself in the thoughts of my life I look at the world different now I can see what is ahead but not what is before me Worthless, pointless is what it seems Feeling alive is like a dream. Deep inside I scream but silence prevails I can’t say with words how I feel. But the thoughts spin on in my hamster wheel.

SupremeDreamer 28-Jan-06/1:11 PM
Cliched, not at all original, perfect example of emotional teenage dribble. Try to cut down on the use of "I", that is, if you wish to strengthen your writing a little.

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