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Prozac (Free verse) by Glasseyez

Numb to the world I shut it out Nothing could save me but love Yet I chase it away with doubt I used to be deep but something happened Lost myself in the thoughts of my life I look at the world different now I can see what is ahead but not what is before me Worthless, pointless is what it seems Feeling alive is like a dream. Deep inside I scream but silence prevails I can’t say with words how I feel. But the thoughts spin on in my hamster wheel.

Dovina 26-Jan-06/1:51 PM
You have a worthy subject for a poem, and in some ways it's a good poem as written. I say this because it's poorly constructed and incompletely thought out, which reflects the key line, "I used to be deep but something happened."




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