ecargo23 Jan 2006

I bet it was cathartic to write this, but it's more diary entry than poem, really. I don't mean that in a mean way. The cutting is a good place to start and a great, strong image--play around with that, maybe; try to make it a little more symbolic or indirect, instead of telling us everything straight out the way you do. You don't have to get fancy, but make it strong by centering it on something:

I have this knife--
a way to live my life
high from letting my blood pour out

see? Your words, but it starts in the midst of it, and it'll take you further than just pouring your heart out as you would to a friend, you know?

Of course, you may have just written it to feel better. :) But if you really want to learn to write poetry, Zodiac is right--read good poetry.

Good luck.