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A flightless deer (Free verse) by Enkidu

On the route where the trees line the forest walls I saw a deer. I saw it eating; it was eating, not flying. Not flying, because it had neither wings nor feathers to cover the wings it didn't have. The wings of the bird I cannot name are blue. The feathers are soft, but I cannot feel them. I cannot feel them like I cannot feel the wings of the flightless deer. There is little commotion on the route where the trees line the forest walls.

ALChemy 19-Jan-06/12:36 PM
Maybe the deer wasn't flying because it wasn't Christmas yet. You might want to use an animal that hasn't been associated with flying.(hint: Don't use pigs either)




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