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I'm Sorry (Free verse) by PawnedTidal

I'm sorry I corrupted you With my imperfect existence. I'm sorry I complicated your life With my never-ending resistance. I'm sorry that I compared you To those from my past. I'm sorry I forgot to compare That those didn't last. I'm sorry I wasn't worth The tears you cried for me. I'm sorry for the pain I caused When I said it wasn't meant to be. I'm sorry I said good-bye, And turned your love away. I'm sorry it's taken me this long To realize I wanted you to stay.

[mojo] 8-Sep-02/9:28 AM
A little work required on stanza two, lines three and four. Not too sure that "compare" was the right choice of word, doesn't seem to make literal sense. Other wise promising.6.




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