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Flow (Free verse) by zodiac

Nights she dreams the bedroom, farmhouse, cornrows plowed straight, come unmoored. This is too good, she thinks, this straightness, this hard earth of certitude, love. There will be flood, flux, sinkage, some nadir. There will be earth-pull, that waiting ocean, Memory.

ALChemy 12-Jan-06/3:02 PM
Yeah I said that wrong, totally wrong. I think what I meant was that he uses visual layout to effect the sound as opposed to letting the reader find their own pauses. I see how it seems necessary in this poem. Basically I'm saying he tends to use a rigid structure in his own way. He kinda writes in a subtle William Shatner/Christopher Walkin type speach. This is something I really like about his poems though.
Anyway I should think about what I'm trying to say before I say it. I'm sure later I'll feel stupid about something I said in this comment too. Somedays I just don't express myself very well.




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