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Tulip (Free verse) by richa

The poor tulip boy has poor taste that he loves his patch and his trowel and spade and his landlord, the dame, that he sells to in the market his red and yellow flames. I am a poor tulip boy with not a purse nor a name made to grow tulips in clay and sleep in my shoes on a poor tulip boy wage happy, to sell none today.

http://mulberryfairy 10-Jan-06/8:26 PM
seems like you are forcing some words in here for the sake of your meter- the poor tulip boy has poor taste "that" he loves... (for?)(as?)that doesn't seem to be the right definitive article. Ignoring your meter, I would take out the "that" completely, then remove the "ands" in the 3rd and 4th lines.
with neither purse nor name (why so many articles?)
I like the dichotomy of him loving his plot, but being on a wage- puzzling.




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