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What Matters (Haiku) by Dovina

Bright eyes flanked his chin, tender smile above his nose. I knew he loved me.

INTRANSIT 9-Jan-06/8:49 AM
This reads like a sentence in a novel to me. I hate to hardcore you like that but, it's flat.




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