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What Matters (Haiku) by Dovina

Bright eyes flanked his chin, tender smile above his nose. I knew he loved me.

zodiac 8-Jan-06/8:31 PM
Put a colon after "nose" to make it a sentence. You're cute when you're smitten. Shallow, yes, but love is shallow.




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