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Flicking (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

My thoughts stumble as I watch them lean into the apex Thrust against chicanes Bank on that complex compound that soft encouraging lip all the while keeping eyes fixed on the leader point of blind curves exit and roll on.

Dovina 8-Jan-06/3:59 PM
Not sure apex is what you mean, try spiral. And maybe curves should be curve. Otherwise good.




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