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This Is Me (Free verse) by PoeticXTC

This is me, I`m one of a kind. Brown, chinky eyes not easy to define. Shoulder length hair dark-brown and blonde Soft lips that speak truth; my word is bond. Beauty, smooth skin touched by none. A bright smile that could melt the sun. Sexy, tight frame not to be mistakened This gift is made for one, others are foresakened. Ivory key like teeth in two straight rows strong, neat from a slight correction Legs, muscular, like track stars Body, Built to perfection. Strong, working hands, worked to the bone. Pencil thin fingers most prized possession owned. Soft, cushy, tushy never missed by eyes. Surrounded by thick, ham like thighs. Never can be broken, standing tall and strong They envy such definition, seems nothing`s wrong Everyones view from the outside in Wanting what they don`t have, Forgetting envy is sin.

Niphredil 6-Jan-06/2:29 AM
Excuse me?
"Soft, cushy, tushy never missed by eyes.
Surrounded by thick, ham like thighs."
Is this a description of your personality? Because if it is, I beg pardon, you're obviously very interesting...

I assure you I caught your *point* in the poem, since it was glaringly obvious. But my previous statements still hold; you leave no room for thought, and instead you bombard the reader with a one-sided statement. It's like being force-fed. You don't really enjoy the food.




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