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Shadow's Stride (Free verse) by D. $ Fontera

I shred tears down From crimson eyes And whittle some fears Into lies, I know It's you Grounded latches catch And fetch me in the dark By the ankles While I stammer there Clouds wound round Your hair Are darker to me Than all the shades In this black room

LilMsLadyPoet 3-Jan-06/8:58 PM
shred reads as a typo...the single comma....'round...
other than that the images are dark, but don't paint an entire picture well. It attempts to, but doesn't. I'd say keep working on it...make it more clear what is going on. (all the shades in this black room? black says black...no color...)




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